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Title: High
Author: girlpire
Rating: E for everyone?
Pairing: Gen, a minor reference to Angel/Spike
Disclaimer: This story is based on the "Angel" series, with which I am not affiliated in any way. Joss Whedon is my master, etc.
Distribution: Please no. kthnxbye. :)
Summary: Post-NFA. What's left of Team Angel is fighting the good fight in Chicago, and a vision leads Spike and Angel down into the sewers to rescue a young English man called Jacob.
Warnings: None in this part.
Author's Notes: This story is a prequel to [Like Drowning], the Angel/Kate story I wrote last summer. Since this comes chronologically before that one, you don't need to have read it to understand this one. It's based on these prompts from [livejournal.com profile] frimfram: Spike saving Angel, a ghost train, and a reference to St. Petersburg.

*The story has been broken into five parts.
[One.]
[Two.]
[Three.]
[Four.]
This is part five.




Previously: A strange look suddenly comes over Spike's face. He shakes it off and tries to continue, "Decides to - to get blitzed on... this, ah... before he..." Spike closes his eyes for a second, swaying. He starts to tip over, but Illyria, head cocked to one side, grabs his shoulder to keep him upright. He opens his eyes again a moment later and looks over at Jacob, now grinning broadly. "The hell is in this stuff anyway?" Spike asks him. "It's bloody fantastic!"

High, Part 5 of 5

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Spike is humming. It's a pleasant song, although Jacob doesn't recognize it. The blond has a cloth and a bowl of water, and he's wiping the blood from Angel's wounds in the same rhythm that he's humming in, tapping out the beat with the toe of his boot and bobbing his head as he works. He looks as though he's listening to an Ipod and has forgotten not everyone can hear the music, but he isn't. It's just playing in his head. He doesn't seem to mind that his clothes are hanging from him in tatters.

Jacob wonders how Spike became the nursemaid of the group. He just seems a little too... gruff isn't really the word. Reluctant, certainly. Like it's inconvenient. He doesn't seem to want to be the one who tends the wounds of the others, but he's quicker about it than Gunn could be, more gentle than Illyria, and Jacob gets the impression that Angel is often the one who needs the doctoring, so the responsibility falls to Spike anyway. Of course, this time he doesn't mind at all; he's cheerfully whistling a bridge as he removes the crossbow bolt from Angel's hand. But if he weren't so happy right now, he'd probably be complaining about having to clean up the other vampire again.

If he were one of them, Jacob wonders, how would he fit in? Would he take over as nursemaid? He knows he couldn't be a fighter, and Gunn seems to have everything else covered. How useful could a sort of biologist, sort of writer actually be to a group of paranormal detectives? He doesn't have anything to offer them.

He hasn't gone to the hospital yet to treat the deep bite mark on his neck. He knows he ought to, but he's reluctant to leave. If he leaves, he may not ever see these people again, and they're the only people he's met in Chicago so far with whom he's felt a genuine connection. He hadn't really thought about how lonely he had been before, but now that he feels as though his welcome may soon wear out, he doesn't want to go.

Of course, he hadn't particularly enjoyed being nearly killed twice. Well, he'd enjoyed it the first time, but that doesn't count. He feels certain he wouldn't have enjoyed it under normal circumstances. And if he insinuated himself into this group, in whatever capacity, it's likely that he would be nearly killed again. Perhaps many times. Perhaps one of those times, he would actually die. There's a disturbing thought.

But they're doing good work here, aren't they? Exciting work - saving the world! That's how Spike had put it. And if you're going to die anyway - which you are - it might as well be for the good of the world, right?

Jacob watches Gunn hold another blood bag to Angel's lips. Not that they would ask him to stay and join up. The vampire, without opening his eyes, bites into the bag. The mark on Jacob's neck tingles under the cloth he's holding to it. He'd just be a liability.

There are two chairs in the room. He's sitting in the one farthest from the bed, and Illyria is watching him from where she stands in the corner. He looks up at her and gives her a little smile. Her expression doesn't change. She's completely still, and he wonders for a moment if she's gone to sleep, but then she walks over to him. "I wish to know your thoughts," she says quietly. "Speak them."

He sees Gunn glance over with an eyebrow raised. "I was just thinking," Jacob replies, "that I ought to go soon."

Illyria tilts her head to one side in the manner of a bird considering an insect. "Why?" she asks him.

"Well... because things are back to normal now, aren't they?"

Spike laughs under his breath. "Normal," he says. "Yeah, right."

Gunn is grinning. He gestures to the bag of blood he's still feeding Angel. "You think this kind of thing is normal?" he asks. He turns to Spike and sighs, "He's already becoming one of us."

"Was bound to happen, all that time you spent with him," Spike says, wrapping a bandage around Angel's palm. "I probably shouldn't have saved him that second time. Could have spared him some terrible memories, at least. But you know how I am - can't deny my heroic nature and all." He smirks.

"Terrible memories?" asks Jacob.

"Oh, yeah," Spike says. "Working with Angel here - actually having any sort of relationship with him at all - and the bad experiences tend to add up. I remember this one time in St. Petersburg--" At a look from Gunn, he abruptly stops. "Story for another time, then," he says.

"Did you say working with?" Jacob asks. He sits up a little straighter in his chair, tries not to look too hopeful. "Working with, as in--"

"We thought maybe you could help out now and then," Gunn explains, "if you have the time. Fresh perspective, you know? We could pay you. Not very much, but we do sometimes get a little something from our clients. Maybe on a case-by-case basis, we could--"

"The fact is," Spike interrupts, "if it hadn't been for you figuring out his insides were just for show, we'd still have an evil bastard chained to the bed, instead of this regular, run-of-the-mill bastard. Which is only a slight improvement, really, but it's still an improvement. Depending on who you ask."

"Your continued presence is required," Illyria says. "You cannot leave." She says it as though the matter is settled, and Spike snorts a small laugh.

Gunn chuckles a little embarrassedly. "What she means is--"

"I desire him," Illyria says. "I will not allow his departure."

Spike and Gunn look at each other, amused. Jacob blinks. He feels the back of his neck turn red. "I... ah..."

"He desires me as well," she adds.

"You can start immediately," says Gunn. "We don't actually have a case right now, but--"

"Guys," a quiet voice interrupts. Jacob, Gunn, Spike, and Illyria look at Angel. His eyes flutter open as Gunn pulls the emptied blood bag away from his mouth. "Don't I get a say in this?" he asks.

"No," says Spike.

"Sorry, man," Gunn agrees. "You're recently evil. Privileges revoked for three days; you know how it is."

Angel sighs wearily and closes his eyes again. "Fine," he says. "But at least let him decide for himself."

"The decision has been made," says Illyria.

"He's got to say it, pet, not you," Spike tells her.

Jacob is a bit overwhelmed, but excited nonetheless. "Of course," he says. "Of course, yes, I'd love to work with you."

"Great, it's settled," says Gunn. "It's a good thing I haven't ordered the new business cards yet. I'll make sure your name is added." He pauses for a second and smiles. "Hey, now I won't be the only one with a last name." Then he frowns. "You do have a last name, don't you?" he asks. "It's not just Jacob?"

Jacob smiles. "Yes," he says. "I'm sorry, I suppose I never introduced myself properly. My full name is Dr. Mark Jacob Wyndam-Pryce."

This sentence is followed by a very long and unexpected silence. Gunn, Spike, and Illyria all stare at Jacob, and he begins to feel slightly self-conscious. "I've always gone by my middle name," Jacob ventures hesitantly. "That isn't a problem, is it?"

Gunn and Spike look at each other. Jacob can't read their expressions. Illyria looks as though she's examining him all over, his hair, his ears, his eyes especially. He swallows, wondering if he's said something offensive.

It is Angel who finally breaks the uncomfortable spell in the room. Still manacled to the bed, his eyes closed, the vampire says, "Alright. He stays."

*

Higher beings are supposed to be objective. That's why they don't allow many former humans into their little floaty club - because apparently, former humans have a vested interest in the goings-on Down There and will try to manipulate the timeline in order to accomplish their own personal goals. A higher being is supposed to allow what happens to happen without intervention. Without any interference whatsoever from anyone, Good would always triumph over Evil and there would actually be no need for Heroes or Champions of any sort, because things would always work themselves out on their own.

Once, near the Beginning, a formerly human higher being interfered - thinking he was doing something helpful - and it all went to crap. Changing one thing caused the entire timeline to veer off course, and Bad things started happening that outweighed the Good things. The higher being was punished obviously, but it was too late. The other highers had to recruit Champions, designate Messengers, and organize an active retaliative movement against the Evil that was suddenly triumphing all over the place.

Everyone Up Here has been grumpy ever since.

For the most part, they still allow things to happen. Only when they look ahead and see an unavoidable Evil happening do they interfere, and only in a very small way. A message, a prophecy, a vision. Everything still has to be done by the humans, who are, lets face it, extremely difficult to work with. Other highers have tried in the past to find the Original Interference and change it back, but their efforts have been in vain. The last one resulted in the largely embarrassing Disco movement, and no one has tried since for fear of a similar catastrophe. For which this particular higher being is exceedingly grateful.

Technically, she wasn't supposed to interfere on Jacob's behalf. He hadn't been destined for Great Things. He had been destined for Lunch. When confronted by the other highers, the only justification that she could come up with was that he was the first cousin of a former Hero, who, before being tragically killed in the fight against Evil, had been best friends with a current Champion, and by sending the Champion to rescue and befriend him, she was... somehow... reinforcing the Champion's... mental... wellbeing? Of course it had all come out much more convincing than that. (She could have been a great actress.) They allowed it, and she filed Jacob under L for lunch, and proceeded to watch a rather entertaining couple of days in the lives of her former friends.

If she had known about the Angelus thing, she maybe would have rethought the interference, but Jacob had actually proven himself kind of useful in coming up with a solution, which was pleasing. He sort of reminds her of Wesley when she first met him, only less stuffy. Plus there was that whole thing with Spike in Angel's bedroom, which she's watched many many times because, in the words of one of the other highers, Damn, that shit's hot.

In the two years since the big fighty fight in the alley back in L.A., Jacob is the only waking vision she's sent her Champion - the other hints and tips appeared in dreams, since those are more difficult for the other higher beings to detect. But now that she's renewed the link between them, she's anxious to communicate more. There are so many people in his new city that need saving, and so few people who are capable of doing it. She and the other highers can hold off the Evil that's searching for him long enough to get in a few saved innocents. And the innocents are the tally Evil uses to see who's winning.

She's looking Down at him now. Not quite healed up yet, but he will be very soon. She looks forward several hours and does a sweep. There. There's one. A child. Children are extra points.

She'll give him a couple hours to regroup, then hit him up with another vision. Maybe she can sneak in a more personal message, too. (She's formerly human, after all, and freely admits having a vested interest.) Maybe something like:

"Hello, salty goodness.
Take more showers for me.
Higher love, Queen C."

*

end.

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Date: 2007-03-05 02:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] adoxerella.livejournal.com
Very nice ending. I liked how the whole gang just kind of accepts that Jacob has fallen in with them, even before the bombshell of his last name.

I, also, loved the little wrap up with Cordy, especially
Plus there was that whole scene with Spike in Angel's bedroom, which she's watched many many times because, in the words of one of the other highers, Damn, that shit's hot.
Although now I want to know who the other higher was, because, yes, yes it is.

I really enjoyed this story. Thanks for sharing it.

Date: 2007-03-05 03:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
I liked how the whole gang just kind of accepts that Jacob has fallen in with them, even before the bombshell of his last name.

thanks! i wanted to make sure they already liked him for who he was before they found out... well, who he was - because i don't ever want it to be an issue of whether they're just keeping him around out of obligation to wesley, you know?

the other higher was doyle! heh, jk. i sincerely doubt doyle would have said that...

Date: 2007-03-05 02:52 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thatotherperv.livejournal.com
seeeee, I have such great timing, I got it all at once :D

I love that everything is fucked up in the first place because someone tinkered. and I love that Cordy repeatedly watches the vampire porn feeding porn.

oh, he's Wesley's cousin. how heartbreaking, and at the same time wonderful. *squishes all of them*

great stuff, babe.

Date: 2007-03-05 04:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
I love that everything is fucked up in the first place because someone tinkered.

i'm glad! because that's the only explanation i have. :)

now i've got to go read your xangel. or, well, when i get off work.

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Date: 2007-03-05 02:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lilithbint.livejournal.com
Ahh...
*is totally satisfied*
love the higher power references and I even grinned when I realised who had been interfering.
excellent my dear.

Date: 2007-03-05 04:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
thank you very much! :D

Date: 2007-03-05 03:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] spartan5000.livejournal.com
"Damn, that shit's hot."

LOL, that's a scene I would pay to see.

Loved this story, loved that the characters were so darned... true. Thank you.

Date: 2007-03-05 04:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
haha, wouldn't we all... ;)

thanks for the comment. it's a high compliment. (get it? high? ...i'm so lame.)

Date: 2007-03-05 07:26 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] makd.livejournal.com
I adore this fic; I adore the OC; I adore the way you've written the entire thing; I adore the ending.

IOW, I really, really, liked it. :-)

Will there be more? (no pressure.) :-)

Date: 2007-03-05 04:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
i am beyond happy that you liked it! you know, the production of this story is due in large part to you. i probably wouldn't have written it without such a good response to "like drowning" - and i wouldn't have gotten such a good response without your rec! so feel free to take as much credit as you'd like. :D

i've actually fallen into such like with these characters by writing this story that i'd feel terrible if i abandoned them at this point... so yes, there will be more. but it will probably be a while before i write it. it took several months to get this one written after the other one. *sigh* i am slow, i am slow.

the next story in this verse will be a prequel to this one, from angel's pov following the alley battle. i am writing the whole thing backwards! heh. i also have a very serious/sad installment planned from gunn's pov (which will come chronologically between the angel one and this one), a short funny story from illyria's pov (which will come chronologically between this one and "like drowning"), and a funny one from spike's pov (which will come chronologically after "like drowning"). i've basically got four years of this verse planned out already, but the actual writing of it? may take even longer. but no pressure, right? :)

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Date: 2007-03-05 07:29 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cafedemonde.livejournal.com
Oddly sweet! And I wish there was TiVo for Spike in Angel's room feeding.

Looking forward to more of Jacob and the crew.

Date: 2007-03-05 05:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
thanks! i've actually got the whole thing on video, but i swore not to show it around. me + angel + spike = bff. :)

i hope you don't have to wait long for the next chicago verse story! if i can get my butt in gear and just go ahead and write it...
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Date: 2007-03-05 05:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
hey, you have the right to perv over spangel all you want! that's what fandom is for, right? ...right?

haha, jacob is the KING OF OCS! :D although i'm thinking ming will give him a run for his money soon enough. i'm planning a couple more stories in this verse.

thanks for your comments and encouragement. much appreciated. :D

Date: 2007-03-05 08:41 am (UTC)
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Great ending. I loved that Cordy bookmarks the whole thing and the connection with Wesley is great. It's sort of like the whole gang is back together and ready for new adventures.

There will be new adventures, right?

Date: 2007-03-05 05:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
yes, new adventures for all! (see above comment to makd for a rundown of my plans for this 'verse.) i'm glad you liked the wesley connection - i was worried it would be too cheesy. and improbable. but not more improbable than some of the things that actually happened in canon! :) i'm still a little iffy on the cordelia thing. i might go back and rewrite a bit of the first part to make the bookends match better... but all in all, i'm fairly satisfied. thanks so much for all your help and encouragement throughout the process. :D

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Date: 2007-03-05 12:33 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lokapala.livejournal.com
Nice wrap, confusing Wyndam-Pryce coincidence, wonderful Illyria voice. Thanke you =)

Date: 2007-03-05 05:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
thanks! you think the wesley connection was confusing? *sadface*

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Date: 2007-03-05 07:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] darkspace99.livejournal.com
Hi, I really like this story! I used to be a lurker but I've finally decided to get an lj and comment on stories. Pleeeease write some more!

Date: 2007-03-05 09:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
thanks, i'm so glad you like it! there are more chicago!verse stories in the works. :)

Date: 2007-03-05 10:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] spankspike.livejournal.com
That was excellent - I loved every bit of it!

For some reason I especially liked that you let Gunn still be around, because no one (even me) seems to ever write him making it through that last fight. But I was really enjoing his interactions with Illyria.

"The fact is," Spike interrupts, "if it hadn't been for you figuring out his insides were just for show, we'd still have an evil bastard chained to the bed, instead of this regular, run-of-the-mill bastard. Which is only a slight improvement, really, but it's still an improvement. Depending on who you ask."

Again, I love how Spike explains/describes things. They often gave him the best lines on the show - and now a lot of us tend to mirror that when we write him. And when he insults Angel it's just so damn good, because you know it comes from a place of very real knowledge about Angel and all of his faults and good points, and sort of from a place of affection too - even for those who don't believe they were shagging like bunnies. (Which we, of course, know to be totally true!)

I also love how Illyria just sort of decided that things would be the way that she wanted them to be, once she has decided that someone sort of belongs to her - well, they just do.

Other highers have tried in the past to find the Original Interference and change it back, but their efforts have been in vain. The last one resulted in the largely embarrassing Disco movement, and no one has tried since for fear of a similar catastrophe.

*snerk* I always wondered what caused that. And how sad is it that I actually used to listen to that music. Of course I would never do that now. *Hides extensive Donna Summer collection, slips Saturday Night Fever soundtrack under the couch*

"Hello, salty goodness.
Take more showers for me.
Higher love, Queen C."


Ahh Cordy, how I loved her. And how I hated them for destroying her terribly.

Plus there was that whole scene with Spike in Angel's bedroom, which she's watched many many times because, in the words of one of the other highers, Damn, that shit's hot.

Now here's the part where I make a fic request from you - which is really what [livejournal.com profile] feedmykink was supposed to be for anyway! Write that Spike/Angel bedroom scene as something Cordelia's watching, and she gets caught by another of the Higher Beings - and she's like, "Oh that - that's just porn." and clicks it off, putting it away for safekeeping and repeated viewing.

I need that lost scene!!!!

Date: 2007-03-07 03:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
And when he insults Angel it's just so damn good, because you know it comes from a place of very real knowledge about Angel and all of his faults and good points, and sort of from a place of affection too

that's exactly how i feel! although the shagging that was going on? i think was mostly in my head and not so much canonical. but it's easy to believe in the power of the buttsecks when it comes to spike and angel. :)

*Hides extensive Donna Summer collection, slips Saturday Night Fever soundtrack under the couch*

you are so old. :P

i might go back and write the lost scene later... although i won't make it part of this verse because in this verse the vampires are straight! ...mostly. :D

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Date: 2007-03-05 10:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] spankspike.livejournal.com
I had also meant to say that I'd actually had an actor in my head while I was reading your character. And I mean Jacob, just in case you didn't know. Which is very weird. I do usually get kind of a picture in my head when I read about a character, how he/she looks - but I don't usually picture them as a specific actor.

Here's what I was thinking -



Which is really pretty close to what you came up with (except mine is wearing that dorky Miami Vice style jacket for some reason). I guess I'll let you go with your own guy - since it is your story. *sighs in a put upon way*

Date: 2007-03-07 04:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
who is that? the features are actually sort of similar to what i was thinking, although this one doesn't look dorky enough. (jacob is sort of a dork... but like, a cool one. if that makes sense.)

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Date: 2007-03-07 01:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] samifidler.livejournal.com
**ETA: This is my idea of Jacob:**

Damn, that's exactly the way I pictured him!!!

**"Hello, salty goodness.
Take more showers for me.
Higher love, Queen C."**;<p

Date: 2007-03-07 04:05 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
yay! you know whose face i used? wesley's! only i made it slightly wider and darkened his eyebrows to match the hair. :D i also used wesley's face on one of the banners, although i changed his hair and gave him green eyes.

Date: 2007-03-10 12:45 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] astridv.livejournal.com
Okay, last week I was too sick to even read fic, so it's only now that I get the chance to read the final chapter and to tell you I absolutely love the plot, the dialog, the setting... the whole 'verse. Jacob is a great addition to the team.

I'm thrilled that you're planning more stories, and a prequel, too... I'm rather curious how they ended up in Chicago.

(I shall rec this fic when I'm back on my feet... *cough*)

Date: 2007-03-14 09:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
thank you so much! that's exactly what the prequel will be dealing with. i think. :)

i was going to say i hope you feel better, but i see you have already recced my story, so you must be feeling better already. to which i say, yay! and thank you for the rec. :D

Date: 2007-03-13 04:59 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] the-nites-gurl.livejournal.com
This was just WONDERFUL! I really enjoyed reading this! Thanks :)

Date: 2007-03-14 08:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
thanks so much, i really appreciate that. :D
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Date: 2007-03-14 09:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
thank you! and i plan on it. i hope you read more in this series. :D

Date: 2007-03-15 08:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] frimfram.livejournal.com
Ah! I love it! I LOVE it! I love how... un-over-the-top it all was. The humour's all very understated, and you made each character loveable.

I loved what you did with the train prompt, too. That's one haunting image. And I love how you totally copped out of the St. Petersburg prompt ;P

Just perfect stuff dude - is there more?

Date: 2007-03-15 09:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
woohoo! \o/

The humour's all very understated

there's humor? *blinks*
actually, that's how i always am. people tell me i'm funny, and i'm like... you should get out more. when i do actually try for funny, i come across as a complete cornball.

you totally copped out of the St. Petersburg prompt

haha! you noticed. the truth is, i had written the whole thing and then realized i hadn't included it at all. so i went back and added it in. :D but hey! it's there! and it's all for you.

is there more?

yes, but it's currently only existing in my head. right now i'm working on something i thought of last night, which is very complicated... it's a sort of comedy of errors with a very large cast, and i keep getting confused... but you'll love it! because you are much smarter than i am.

Date: 2007-03-17 05:15 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ares132006.livejournal.com
Thoroughly enjoyed reading this tale. I loved your humour, loved the new Wyndham-Pryce and his perspective.
Not to mention the by-play between Spike and Angel(us).

Thank you, I hope there will be more in this series. I have also read Drowning and will go there to feedback.
Hugs

Date: 2007-03-23 03:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
thank you! there will definitely be more in this series - when i can make myself get to it. :) the next one is going to be a prequel to this one though. (i am writing the entire series backwards! heh.) i'm so glad you like it.

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Date: 2007-03-24 11:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] elemmire.livejournal.com
What a lovely story! I hope to see more from this 'verse :)

(And I'm sorry I'm late with the feedback... :P)

Date: 2007-03-27 06:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
thank so much! there will be more at some point.

and re: feedback, better late than never. :D

Date: 2007-08-30 10:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jedicaroline.livejournal.com
Great story! I like Jacob and am looking forward to any sequels. :)

Date: 2007-09-06 04:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] girlpire.livejournal.com
thank you! jacob will definitely be making more appearances in this journal at some point. :)

Date: 2010-03-28 12:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tpena19.livejournal.com
oh wow, wasn't expecting that last name, though maybe I should have been. I like the Queen C end too, cheeky bint ;)

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